To tell you the truth, I'm not into it- not because of the writing! In fact, from what I've read of the book, you write quite well. It's the subject matter. I don't want to read about a teenager with "Daddy" fantasies. It... just rubs me the wrong way.
The original version of this story was posted on Literotica, nearly ten years ago. I got a lot of comments, but I got many more private messages and emails. A pattern quickly formed. Most of them were women over 35, and all them said, "I want to be Little One." The women under 35 all asked, "Where can I find a Daddy?"
The were a few men who commented. Their questions all ran along the lines of, "How much of the story is real?" and "Is it still possible to buy an orphan?"
You're an interesting person. The only woman who ever loved me is from Pennsylvania, just outside Pittsburgh to be more vague. I have since developed a predilection to find Pennsylvanians more trustworthy than, say, New Yorkers or Cally-fornyans. Lol. Just kidding, mostly. ; )